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Post by Nightmare on Jul 24, 2023 0:12:40 GMT -5
So hey guys, long time I know.
It's been a very long time since I've written anything and to be fair this is the first time in 20 years I've ever felt nervous posting something. I kinda used this as a way to channel somethings I've been feeling and thinking with what has happened in my real life if anything to not make my head not so cloudy. I'd love some feedback if anyone would be open to giving me some.
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Joe Summers
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Post by Joe Summers on Jul 26, 2023 21:57:53 GMT -5
I thought this was really, really good work. You've always been good at painting an image and setting a tone with your writing - this was no exception. You could feel what Nightmare was saying and what he was trying to get across. You gave the character a mission statement (and the reason that he has that mission statement), you put us in a place where we could feel what Nightmare was feeling, and that's really all that you can ask for in an RP.
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Post by Mighty Frank on Jul 27, 2023 10:15:26 GMT -5
Good work, as can be expected from you. Glad you're back.
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